Oh, yes, this was atrocious! I hit the phrase "palsied channel" in the sex scene in chapter 8, and spent a fair bit of time after that wondering why anyone would consider it a good writing choice.

(I don't know if you need recs? If so, I really enjoyed Irregulars, a shared-world m/m novella collection wherein a secret police force solve supernatural (goblins, fairies, a Mexican-based mythos etc) crimes in contemporary settings. One of the 4 stories is by Josh Lanyon, although I actually liked the others better)